Lesson Plan form for  Paul Rombough/
Chateauguay Valley High School  (Tower University Grade 8 Site)
Date:    April 6   Period 3
Class:          English
Objective:   To edit an essay for form, content flow and grammer (using codes)
Materials:    Overheads, edited book reports
Opening Motivational Set:    Go over teacher's editing experience with the book reports
Procedure:
1.  3 minute grammar on board  (section 1 of notebook)
Comma Rule #1
Use a comma to mark off additional, but not essential information about a noun that comes before the information.
Eg1 :      My sister, who has red hair, is wearing a brown dress.
Eg2 :      My sister is wearing jeans, which is cool when they're black and funky.
(note that second example's clause is not a complete sentence


2.   Editing Codes on Overhead (for section 1 of notebook)
"These codes may help identify grammar related problems"

3.   Review essay form using a more generalized overhead, to point out "how a clear and predictable form helps the reader "

4.  Discuss some things which help the essay's content to flow more evenly, such as, 
"Are the paragraphs developed evenly, clearly, deeply....etc."

5.  Pass back edited (by teacher) book report essays, and students rewrite them into a good draft until 10 minutes before the end of the class.

6.  Review the requirements of short story to be completed for tomorrow's peer editing session.

 
Followup/ Evaluation:
Peer editing for a partner's short story is scheduled for tomorrow

Editing Codes for April 6th

N.C.    - Not clear.
The meaning is not clear.

Awk.   -  Awkward syntax or phrasing.
Not the best way to say it.

V.A.P.  -  Verb agreement problem.
"John and Mary is cool" (Wrong.  Should be "are cool" because there are two.)

V.T.P.  -  Verb tense problem.
When using "I will run", use "I will also jump", not "I would",  or "I am jumping".

M.W.  -  Misused word.
Perhaps a difficult word was misused.  Or perhaps you used the wrong preposition.

M.P.   -  Misused period.
Should have been a comma, or maybe nothing at all.  (goes with I.S.)

I.S.     -   Incomplete sentence.
Because of words used (that, which), the phrase depends too much on the previous sentence, and is actually a part of that first sentence.

S.S.    -  Spliced sentence.
This is when two sentences are spliced (joined) together.  Period and captial are missing.

L.P.    -  Lost pronoun
This is when a pronoun (they, I, he) is used and it is not clear whom you are talking about.
When in doubt, use their name, until it sounds repetitive, then use a pronoun.
 


Basic Elements of An Essay


1.  Introduction:

-  Catchy language

-  Reason/ purpose

-  Preview of sections coming up.

2.  The Body of An Essay:

- Contains three or four sections, divided into paragraphs.

- Each paragraph deals with one topic, including

-looks back on the purpose of the essay
-restate key points
-Ending statement that makes you think